Wednesday, December 5, 2007

New Hat & Comic Book

Let me make clear that this are NOT the final rendering of the comic. These are mere thumbnails ... sketches ... to b given to the artist so that they know how to frame up the comic. The following is the first eight pages of the thirty paged comic book (Whoopi vs. SilentBat: The Fall of Ashten)






PAGE ONE

Two panels. First panel takes up the whole page while the second lies on top of it at the bottom.

PANEL 1

Full page panel of Antoine reading a letter from Ashten and Angela. Antoine’s back is facing the viewer with a desk in front of him. The desk holds a lamp, notebook and pencil on top of it.

ASHTEN (TEXT BOX):

It should have been him. It wasn’t supposed to be her. She shouldn’t be dead and lifeless now. Dumb down to a mere doll … a puppet. That puppet should have been him.

CAPTION: Morning.

PANEL 2

Antoine’s eyes can be seen over the top of the letter.

ASHTEN (TEXT BOX):

He will be once I find the dark aura stone.

PAGE TWO

Five panels. First two panels are equally distributed in size on the top. The third panel shares their same width and overlaps over the fourth panel which the fifth panel lays on top.

PANEL 1

Worm’s eye of Antoine reading the letter. An open door can be seen to his right.

ANTOINE (THOUGHT BUBBLE):

Yours truly, Ashten and Angela.

CAPTION: Afternoon.

PANEL 2

Over Antoine’s shoulder as he continues to read the letter.

PANEL 3

Antoine closes his eyes panel-left as Madam Iaro, a female instructor in her 50s and a head shorter than Antoine, enters the room panel-right.

MADAM IARO:

You must have read that letter two dozen times today.

ANTOINE:

Yeah.

PANEL 4

Madam Iaro stands in the doorway as she continues to speak to Antoine.

MADAM IARO:

A warrior must not dwell on such things like a letter, or a friend. You must take the knowledge presented to you, retain it, and move on.

PANEL 5

C.U. of Antoine’s eye as he listens to Madam Iaro speak.

MADAM IARO:

That is the way of our kind.

PAGE THREE

Five panels. First panel is width of the page. Second panel sits next to the third panel (the third panel being wider). The last two panels are evenly distributed in height and width and accommodate for the rest of page.

PANEL 1

Back of Madam Iaro’s head as Antoine looks out the window.

ANTOINE:

Perhaps our ways should change.

PANEL 2

C.U. of Antoine stuffing the letter into his pocket.

PANEL 3

X.C.U. of Madam Iaro’s lips.

MADAM IARO:

Perhaps.

PANEL 4

Madam Iaro and Antoine face off to each other. Antoine carries a bag over his shoulder. In the background is a dresser and the foot of a bed.

MADAM IARO:

As you may know we were going to culminate Ashten along with you to leave with Madam DaLos today but since he had departed with young Angela we have let your brother Aaron progress in his place. Your brother waits for you at the Academy’s entrance.

ANTOINE:

Yes master.

PANEL 5

Madam Iaro and Antoine walk out of his room and being to leave. Antoine closes the door behind him as they continue conversation.

MADAM IARO:

I wish you well with your advance studies with DaLos. You will be missed here at the Academy.

ANTOINE:

I will miss you too, the Academy as well.

PAGE FOUR

Four panels. The two panels at top share the same width. The third panel is a full page panel and Antoine’s head pokes into panel 2 a little. Panel four sits within panel 3.

PANEL 1

Madam Iaro and Antoine part was as they exit the sleeping quarters/dormitories. The building is brick.

ANTOINE (THOUGHT BUBBLE):

Ashten and Angela’s letter troubles me, and not because of its contents.

PANEL 2

Antoine continues walking through the academy panel-right as he passes a group of students dueling and meditating with each other.

ANTOINE (THOUGHT BUBBLE):

I feel that they have fallen from the light-side. That or they have vanished from my senses completely. Meaning they could be dead.

PANEL 3

Antoine, in a full shot, continues walking out of the Academy. In the background is a staircase to higher floors.

ANTOINE (THOUGHT BUBBLE):

How is it that I cannot sense them? Can Madam Iaro be right? Can my emotions be interrupting my power?

PANEL 4

Low shot behind Antoine’s feet as he walks out of the Acadmey.

PAGE FIVE

Four panels. First three panels are planted together. The second panel sits on top of the divide of panel 1 and 2 (panel 1 being the shorter). The four panel sits on top of the third panel and stretches off page-right.

PANEL 1

C.U. of Antoine’s belt with his saber hanging from it as he walks down the front steps of the Academy’s entrance.

ANTOINE (THOUGHT BUBBLE):

My emotions not only dwell on Ashten and Angela running away.

PANEL 2

Antoine sits forward on the front steps of the Academy as he examines his lightsaber.

ANTOINE (THOUGHT BUBBLE):

Ashten told me I didn’t deserve this. Said I was too weak.

PANEL 3

Antoine sits back comfortably on the front steps as he latches his lightsaber back onto his belt.

ANTOINE (THOUGHT BUBBLE):

I’m beginning to believe him. How could I be so sure of success with my advance training with DaLos? Would I be able to protect my brother?

PANEL 4

CU of Antoine panel-right as a yellow lightsaber is placed to his neck. Oddly enough, he is smiling rather than looking in shock.

AARON: A White Warrior, eh?

SOUND EFFECT: WVVNNN

PAGE SIX

Five panels. The top four are position together on the top half. Panel 1 and 2 share the same tall height and meet the center with Panel 3 and 4 which share the same short width. The bottom panel is large and accommodates for the bottom half of the page.

PANEL 1

Antoine still smirks with the lightsaber to his throat.

ANTOINE:

You still need work with your stealth young one.

PANEL 2

Aaron deactivates his lightsaber as Antoine looks up to him panel-left..

AARON:

Maybe. Or maybe you need to work on your awareness.

SOUND EFFECT: SSSSSP

PANEL 3

X.L.S. of the Academy’s façade as Aaron is standing next to Antoine.

AARON:

I got a gray jacket like you now!

ANTOINE:

They are plain sweat jackets just to signify your rank.

PANEL 4

X.L.S. of the Academy’s façade as Aaron sits next to Antoine.

AARON:

They’re still cool though.

ANTOINE:

Yeah.

PANEL 5

Left profiles of Aaron and Antoine as they speak of more serious manners panel-right.

AARON:

So do you believe the letter they left?

ANTOINE:

I don’t know. Does it matter? What’s done is done.

PAGE SEVEN

Four panels. Top two panels take up half the page and have the same tall height. Bottom two panels take up other half of page and share the same long width.

PANEL 1

The back’s of Aaron as they continue to speak. In the background is a beautiful garden and entrance area to the Academy. The sky is decorated with a brilliant sunset. Both boys are slightly silhouetted.

AARON:

Still, I’m worried, worried for them both.

ANTOINE:

Why would he leave? Why would she leave really leave with him? It doesn’t add up.

PANEL 2

Bird’s eye view of Antoine and Aaron as they sit and speak to each other.

AARON:

Yeah. You sensed it too right? I felt Ashten fall to –

PANEL 3

Right profiles of Antoine and Aaron panel-left as someone off panel speaks.

MADAM DALOS

Hello White Warriors.

PANEL 4

Left profile of Madam DaLos as she speaks panel-right.

MADAM DALOS:

I’m Madam DaLos. Your new master.

This is my new hat ...


[Stuff on comic later ... once I've finished typing it up.]

Peace

4 comments:

v-dog said...

The pictures of you and your new hat are sooo funny to me!! hahhahaha I love your new hat...i may take it from you...Cheetah print lmao

Boredom said...

why the tough guy face?

LiL said...

hahah i agree with val
thats exactly what i IMed you when i say it!

and i think the face is to make up for the lack of a "mean tough face" in that picture of ours.
good upper lip this time lol

*_*Antoine*_* said...

i thought it looked more constipated more than anything. haha!